Excerpt from one of my stories..................
It was a long night. She was standing at her window, lost in her deep thoughts, tried to remember everything. As it was very important for her to consider each and every fine detail. It was neither a simple decision nor a logical one. She was thinking and analysing the best she could. Maybe, she has figured it out, now, everything would be depend on him.
She called him at the church, for where they met the first. While Sitting on the bench,facing the sea,she wondered, how it would be,and moments later she heard a 'Hi'.
She looked back and there he was. Her eyes filled with hope. She expressed each and every feeling she ever had, and how she wanted it to be. The more she speaks , the calmer she gets. She could feel the difference inside her, with the utterance of each and every word.
She cleared out everything but still her heart was full of fear. "will he respond the same way", she asked herself.
That is the only question she had in mind.
"when we express our deepest desire, we expect, we expect a response that lowers the pain"
He was looking down at his phone, and said, "it's okay,lets forget this and move on".
It broke her heart. It was nothing like she had expected, she had expected more,so much more, that anything less than that would not mend anything.
She looked down, took a deep sigh and smiled, to show things are fine.
The more normal he behaved, more heart-breaking it was. She was staring at his face, waiting for him to realise that it had hurt her,but he didn't seem to sense any of it.She got up and walked out, with a grief in her heart that she would never look back,again.
It was a long night. She was standing at her window, lost in her deep thoughts, tried to remember everything. As it was very important for her to consider each and every fine detail. It was neither a simple decision nor a logical one. She was thinking and analysing the best she could. Maybe, she has figured it out, now, everything would be depend on him.
She called him at the church, for where they met the first. While Sitting on the bench,facing the sea,she wondered, how it would be,and moments later she heard a 'Hi'.
She looked back and there he was. Her eyes filled with hope. She expressed each and every feeling she ever had, and how she wanted it to be. The more she speaks , the calmer she gets. She could feel the difference inside her, with the utterance of each and every word.
She cleared out everything but still her heart was full of fear. "will he respond the same way", she asked herself.
That is the only question she had in mind.
"when we express our deepest desire, we expect, we expect a response that lowers the pain"
He was looking down at his phone, and said, "it's okay,lets forget this and move on".
It broke her heart. It was nothing like she had expected, she had expected more,so much more, that anything less than that would not mend anything.
She looked down, took a deep sigh and smiled, to show things are fine.
The more normal he behaved, more heart-breaking it was. She was staring at his face, waiting for him to realise that it had hurt her,but he didn't seem to sense any of it.She got up and walked out, with a grief in her heart that she would never look back,again.
so true and realistic...! U have penned down every detail of the emotion. Very nicely written.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much shruts...good to know that you can find it realistic
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bhami
"The more normal he behaved, more heart-breaking it was."
ReplyDeleteA realistically painful emotion you expressed through this line.
omg!look who's reading....Thank you so much Anubhava gupta!!
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Nice Bhami...very well expressed the feeling of a serious one in a relationship...the ones who take it casually may never understand the depth of it...
ReplyDeleteActually, somewhere somehow allof us have experienced this.
DeleteThank you for your encouragement
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bhami
Wonderful emotions Bhramari, and beautifully put across.
ReplyDeleteThank you hai ji jain sahab!!
Deleteyou should not forget that you were one of the inspiration behind starting Crazy..stupid..life
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bhami
Live example of QUALITY IS MORE IMPORTANT THAN QUANTITY.. Emotions of a girl intricately portrayed...
ReplyDeleteThank you so much shakya for your valuable comment.
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bhami